What follows is the first draft of what is currently scene four of No Good Comes. Stephen King (totally different guy) is in the painful throes of becoming a bloodborn vampire, a process which takes forty nights. His mentor has been through it herself and is talking him through the pain.
POV: first person, Erin’s POV.
“It hurts,” he whispered.
This was the worst part. The days were nothing. Counting and more counting. Beneath the ground, eyes open wide, unseeing but not, galaxies of stars popping and fading, popping and fading. Lying beneath them, there was no pain, there was no before, there was no life. There was calm, there was peace, there was counting.
Coming up at night was like being torn from your own flesh. It was like someone reaching inside you with acid-soaked fingers and pulling out your bones. It was a mirror that reflected the pain of your life back at you in the form of shards of glass. It was claws and flames and razor blades.
It was only the twenty-fourth night.
“I can’t do this,” he said.
“You can. I did it. You can do it.”
I could end it, if he really wanted me to, but I didn’t want him to want me to. I wanted to see him rise. He told me two night ago that his life wasn’t meaningful. That he hadn’t done anything worthwhile. I told him he could be more. I wanted to watch him be more.
“Tell me about the flashes tonight,” I said.
For days he’d been telling me about the flashes of memory that speared through him like knives.
“Why don’t the good memories feel good?” he said. “Why does all of it hurt?”
“Because even the good things you experienced are tinged with loss now, whether it’s because those people are dead, or because you are.”
“I can see the concussion. It’s like a fuzzy black spot, but there is yellow and blue, like it’s fungal, and sometimes red, like blood.”
“Where do you see it?”
I’d grown used to his voice, his unobservable mannerisms, the hitching of metaphoric breath.
I felt his frown when he said, “Behind my eyes, in my brain. Where else would it be?”
“Trauma can manifest anywhere,” I said. “But it’s not unusual for it to be where it should. Have you remembered anything else?”
“About the night … no.”
“You’ll be interviewed when you’re brought up. May as well get used to hearing it, and saying it.”
“The night I died? The night I was murdered? The night I was … I saw something, but I lost it.”
“Yeah, blue writing.”
I’d seen the blue writing, all down the wall at the crime scene, but I couldn’t tell him that. I couldn’t tell him anything. I couldn’t tell him that a new scene had been staged for the discovery of his body.
“Do you remember where the writing was?”
“No. Can we … can we talk about something else? What about … what about Ophelia, are you still playing scrabble? Maybe I could help.”
“She’s given up on me,” I said. “She thinks I cheat.”
“Well, you do, so she wouldn’t be wrong, would she?”
“How about we decide on your name?” I said.
“How about I-Spy?”
“We exhausted that, remember?”
“Why is the moon almost full every night?”
“When did you first notice?”
“The night I first spoke to you.”
“It’s there for you to notice.”
“It’s a test?”
“Everything’s a test.”
“You, Erin? Are you a test?”
“Do you sit here for all the others … there are no others. What is this place? Why are there so many graves?”
“Sometimes there are more of you. But you’re right, there’s nobody else right now. You’d have seen them if there were. You’d have felt them.”
“Are there other places like this? Other graveyards.”
I nodded. “Yes.”
“And others like us?”
“Can I change my mind about doing this?” he said. “Can I stop whatever this is from happening?”
“What are you asking me?”
“Can I die instead?” he said. “If I want the pain to just stop, can I choose to die?”
I could lie, but … “Yes.”
We didn’t speak for a while. I watched him pace, and fall to his knees, and writhe, and crawl. I watched him roll onto his back and wondered if he felt the pain in the back of his head still, or whether it was overwhelmed with bigger, brighter, sharper pain.
“Cassiopeia is backwards,” he said.
“She speaks so highly of you.”
He laughed, then cried. “I miss them. And it’s not even like I really believed in heaven, you know. It’s not like I thought we’d all be reunited one day or anything, but this … why does this hurt so much?”
“I’m sorry it hurts. I’m sorry there’s nothing I can do about it.”
“You can kill me. You can do that, right?”
“It won’t be me,” I said. “You can be killed, but it won’t be me. Do you want that?”
“I don’t know. Yes. No.”
“Is that why you haven’t chosen a name? Because you don’t want to think of yourself as a new person? You don’t want to think about your new life, if you’re not strong enough to reach for it?”
“Erin … Erin … why did you choose it?”
“Because I started a war but the pretty girl got all the credit,” I said. “Never mind.”
“You’re a pretty girl.”
“Never mind. I mean, thank you. I think you should be called Teddy.”
He laughed. “Teddy? Why?”
“Because it suits you.”
“Is it my fuzzy brown fur? My soft, squidgy body? My glassy eyes?”
“Yeah, all those things.”
What was I supposed to say? Soft, sweet, lovable? Was I supposed to tell him that every night, I’ve felt like a child talking to an imaginary friend, somebody that was only mine? That every night his presence has been comforting, and I’ve wanted to hug him, to comfort him back? I couldn’t tell Stephen the real reasons Teddy suited him so much. He’d think I was soft. He’d think I fancied him, and I didn’t want to touch that pile of awkwardness. And to be clear, I was talking about my aversion to romance and relationships. I wasn’t calling him a pile of awkwardness. That would just be rude.
Every night I’ve been here has been a night I didn’t have to spend alone in my dead parents’ caravan or one of Cascade’s guest rooms. Yeah, that wasn’t an ordinary church over there. I wasn’t going to tell him that either.
Instead, the next time I had to talk him through the pain, I told him something I shouldn’t have. “You’ll be stronger than anyone you’ve ever met.”
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